Monthly Archives: August 2012

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If you want to know all about Winnipeg’s latest piece of public art Emptyful see the story on my blog Destination Winnipeg

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The Traits of Good Writing

What are the traits of good writing? How can you give writers specific feedback that will help them improve and feel more confident about their writing skills? I’m heading back into the classroom again next week as a university faculty advisor, acting as a mentor and assessor for student teachers. New educational ideas bombard teachers at a hectic pace that often leaves their heads spinning. It makes it hard to pick out the quality strategies that are actually helpful.  One such strategy I will certainly discuss with the senior and middle years English teachers I’ll be supervising is the 6+1 or Seven Traits of good writing. I used it as an organizational and assessment tool on almost every assignment I gave to my high school students.

The concept is pretty simple. Instead of reading student essays or short stories and assigning an arbitrary grade like 17/20 you grade the piece for seven different qualities. You assign six points for each of the seven traits on the chart above.  The system developed by the Northwest Regional Educational Laboratory in Portland Oregon has provided a common language for teachers to talk about writing with students and has been shown to improve student writing scores on standardized tests. I like it because it helps students pinpoint what areas of their writing they need to work on. For example–students might have great ideas in their writing and you can give them full credit or 6 points for that, even if the words they choose to express those ideas aren’t the best. They might only get 2 points for their word choice. You would then work with the student to improve the quality of their word choice. You could provide information and support so they would learn how to choose words that are more descriptive, detailed and appropriate for kind of writing they are doing.

This poster from Scholastic gives a quick synopsis of what each trait is about. The system gives credit where credit is due and doesn’t let one negative quality of the writing overshadow all the others. Sometimes, for example, a writing piece may be poorly presented. It could be typed in a font that is hard to read, the paragraphs aren’t indented, it is handed in after being scrunched up in the student’s backpack with the remains of their lunch and it is illustrated with crudely drawn diagrams. The overall impression would make the teacher give the student a poor mark. In the 6+1 traits system the most you could deduct for those things would be the 6 presentation points and the student could still get full credit, or a full six points for something like conventions if they had used correct grammar, punctuation and spelling or a full 6 points for voice, if their writing was fresh and original and conveyed their passion for the topic they were writing about. 

That’s just a brief introduction to what 6+1 trait writing is all about. There are hundreds of books and websites that explain the strategy in greater depth. I think the seven traits are helpful not only to teachers and students but to anyone who wants to improve their writing skills. 

Other posts about writing……..

Helping Children Become Writers

Writing For Children Not As Easy As Thought

Six Things To Do Before You Begin Writing A Novel

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Words of Wisdom From Winnipeg Mayor Bill Norrie

I just published a post on my blog Destination Winnipeg about the commencement address the late Winnipeg mayor gave at my son’s university graduation. 

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Learning About the Chinese Cultural Revolution from Fifth Graders

“My great grandma hid in a haystack while the Red Guard stole everything from her house and then burned it to the ground. “

“My great-uncle escaped from China to Hong Kong by swimming through shark-infested waters.”

“My grandparents walked all the way from Shanghai to Hong Kong with seven children. It took many months.”

“My grandma was a member of the Red Guard. She was accused of helping counterrevolutionaries and was arrested but she didn’t blame Mao Zedong. She loved him then and she still does.”

“The Red Guard tortured my great-grandpa by making him drink so much water he got all bloated and swollen. It was very painful. His crime was spelling a word wrong on a poster he made about Mao Zedong.”

“My great-grandpa committed suicide, because the Red Guard took away his business, his house and his family.”

“My grandpa and his family escaped to Taiwan during the Cultural Revolution and I am very glad they did, otherwise I might never have been born.”

I was assigned to teach grade five social studies when I first began working at an international school in Hong Kong.  We were studying modern Chinese history and to help my students understand the turmoil-filled 1960’s I read them a novel called Red Scarf Girl by Ji Li Jiang. It is a first person account written by a woman who was eleven years old when the Cultural Revolution began in China.

    The children readily identified with her since they were eleven years old too. Ms. Jiang’s family was tortured, abused and imprisoned because their ancestors had been rich landlords. There was no greater crime during the Cultural Revolution than having a family tree, which included a member of the upper class, especially a landowner.

After we finished reading the novel the students’ final assignment was to write a letter to the author.  As I graded their work I was surprised how many of the kids had included stories they had heard from relatives who had lived in China during the revolution. The quotes above are all from my fifth grade students’ letters.

Another girl wrote, “My great-grandpa was a Chinese landlord too. The communists took away all of my great-grandfather’s land. His son, my grandpa, ran all the way to Hong Kong to escape.  My grandpa’s brother stayed in China and joined the Communist Party.

  One of the boys in my class talked about his aunt.  “My aunt grew up in main land China and she was brainwashed to believe that Chairman Mao was some sort of immortal god.  Instead of getting good schooling my aunt just learned propaganda about Chairman Mao.  This ruined her life.”

 Children in my class who were not Chinese but were of other Asian backgrounds wrote two of the most interesting letters. One girl said, “I am not Chinese. I am Korean. But I just want you to know that I am from South Korea not North Korea. I am not a communist!”

 One of my students from Japan had a burning question she wanted to ask. “Do you hate Japanese people? I hope not because I am Japanese. I know my ancestors attacked China during World War II and were very mean to your people. But I know how sad you were to be blamed for your ancestors being landowners. I hope you won’t blame me for my ancestors being your enemies. I want to be your Japanese friend.”

Although I was supposed to be teaching my students modern Chinese history they were actually teaching me by sharing their unique family experiences and perspectives. 

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Le gamine au velo- The Kid With a Bike

Want to see a movie that will warm your heart? Looking for a film that will grab your attention in the first few minutes and never let it go? Interested in a modern fairy tale that isn’t saccharine? Then the Belgian film Le gamine au velo or The Kid With A Bike is for you! 

We saw the movie tonight and I’d have to agree with the majority of critics who have given it rave reviews. A young boy named Cyril is abandoned by his Dad, following what we assume is the death of his grandmother who was helping to care for him. Of course Cyril, like most children, has utter faith in his Dad’s love for him and refuses to believe that his father has abandoned him in the state home for adolescents where he’s been sent. The scene where his Dad tells Cyril the brutal truth–”I don’t want you anymore” made me so angry. The Kid With A Bike title stems from the fact that Cyril rides everywhere on his bike. It is a bike returned to him by a kind-hearted woman who buys it back after Cyril’s Dad sells it for some ready cash. 

Cyril’s savior is Samantha, a hairdresser with an open mind and a caring heart who takes him in as a foster child and loves him even when he lashes out at her in anger, gets involved with a local gang and makes her lose her boyfriend. 

My favorite scene in the movie was when Samantha goes to Cyril’s room at night. She thinks she hears him get up. Cyril doesn’t want to talk so he hops back into bed and pretends to be asleep. Samantha sits down on his bed and after a time of silence during which Cyril refuses to answer any questions she asks, she leans over to brush Cyril’s ear and hair. Finally he says softly, “It’s so warm.”  Samantha asks, “What?”  Cyril whispers, “You’re breath.”  It is a tender moment, when you realize Samantha is beginning to crack Cyril’s tough exterior. 

This movie leaves lots of unanswered questions. Why does Samantha choose to keep Cyril? Where is Cyril’s mother? Where is Samantha’s family? Why would the man Cyril assaults and robs choose to forgive him? Why does Cyril’s Dad feel he can’t take care of his son? Will Samantha and Cyril’s relationship work out in the long-term? But these questions don’t detract from the movie and certainly don’t prevent it from tugging at your heart-strings and making you hold your breath as Cyril confronts a variety of dangerous and difficult situations. 

Le gamine au velo is hope inspiring and makes the viewer want to believe that love and forgiveness can set the world straight. 

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A Controversial Wedding Photo

One of our  wedding pictures started a controversy. Dave and I marked our 39th wedding anniversary last Friday. We celebrated the occasion quietly by going out for dinner with a few family members.  Our low-key recognition of the event was perhaps prompted by something that happened in 2010 when I posted a photo of us on our wedding day on my Facebook page.  

Our wedding photo- August 17, 1973

A colleague at the school where we were teaching at the time spotted it, and inspired, suggested all the married couples on our faculty post pictures of themselves on their wedding day on our staff room wall, labeled with the date on which they’d been married. The woman, who had been married herself for over twenty five years, thought all the photos of happy couples would be an inspiration to those on our staff who were still single, and those who had only recently wed. She couldn’t have been more wrong.

Several of the single people on the staff, who had chosen not to marry, were offended by the display of wedding photos. They said it implied that in order to be happy in life you had to be married. Other single people, who wished they were married, but had never had the good fortune to meet the right person, felt ‘left out’ of the wedding photo display.  Some expressed their opinions rather vehemently. They said if we were going to display personal staff pictures they should be in a category that could include everyone on our faculty.

We were teaching at a faith based school and that week during one of our morning devotional times, a woman I had worked with for several years shared something she had never admitted previously to her colleagues. She had been married in the past and had gone through a very difficult divorce just before coming to work at our school. It was not a divorce she wanted, or was happy about, but there was nothing she could do. I realized after she had shared her emotional story that the display of photos of happily married people in our staff room might have been difficult for her to view as well. That got me thinking further. What about the widow on our staff or the young father who had lost his wife to cancer? How would the photo display have made them feel?

One single woman on our faculty shared her concerns  about the wedding photos with my husband and he immediately took our photo down. Other married couples soon followed suit, when they realized blatantly displaying pictures of their wedding day happiness, may have been hurtful to others. There was talk of doing a photo display of staff member’s high school graduation photos instead.

I have been a regular columnist for a regional newspaper called The Carillon for many years. They produce an annual special edition of the paper in which they feature photos of couples from the newspapers’ reading audience that have been married for twenty five, fifty and sixty years.

I’ve always looked forward to that issue, and am interested in all the wedding pictures of people in the community I know. I even submitted our photo when we had been married for twenty -five years. I never even stopped to think about the fact that perhaps widowed, divorced and single people might be saddened or feel inadequate or excluded if they happened to look at the wedding anniversary issue of the paper.

Should we publicly celebrate wedding anniversaries? Since many marriages in our society don’t last for a long time, the fact that two people manage to ‘go the distance’ together is surely something worth commemorating. It is important though to make it clear marriage is not better than other lifestyles, but simply a way of life that if happy and rewarding and long-lasting, should be cherished.

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Diamond Annivesary- A Family Affair

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I Guess I’m A Democrat

I just took an online quiz called I Side With.  You answer a series of multiple choice questions about American domestic policy, foreign policy and social policy issues and your results are processed to see which party you align most closely with. I know I’m a Canadian and not an American citizen, but I’m reasonably knowledgeable about American politics and took the quiz just for interests sake. I had to give my opinions about a host of topics including the war in Afghanistan, abortion, the death penalty, global warming, affirmative action, gun control, immigration, gay marriage and Super Pac advertising. The results? On 92% of issues I side with the Democratic Party. On 8% of issues I side with the Republicans. 

If you’d like to try the quiz yourself –here is the link. 

http://www.isidewith.com/presidential-election-quiz?from=52645707

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